Friday, October 7, 2011

Single-Breath Cabin Poems


i.
Our canoe drifts out,
paddles launch ripples that
die unseen, far away.

ii.
Sunlight pierces trees,
sideways cones of fire that light
this green heart, my heart.

iii.
Lake, bordered by pines, 
reflects just one cloud. I rest 
here, seeing double.

iv.
Afternoon rainfall
drenches us and lines your face 
with happy tears.

v.
Sunset lights up cloud 
bellies. Looking downward, do
they see such beauty? 

vi.
Full moon displaces
stars that would have settled on
this lake like cinders.

--Martin A. Bartels (working draft)
(Author's note may be found under comments)

2 comments:

  1. Most poets eventually succumb to the challenge of condensing thoughts into the tightest forms possible (micropoems and haiku being but two examples).

    I only recently learned (bad on me) that our understanding of haiku has evolved from the school-day 5-7-5 format to one that encourages a 12- to 15-syllable, single-breath format (i.e., you can read it in one breath). I stuck with 5-7-5 anyway, for now, but look forward to more experimentation.

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  2. A beautiful peaceful write - I could sense the beauty of your day.

    Anna :o]

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